Please update the rough draft with the peer review prof. comment

 
Please update the rough draft with the peer review
prof. comment
“Good analysis of the themes of this painting. Don’t forget to finish formatting your headers and title”.
please see the peer review attachment to update the attached rough draft
  
Peer Review Worksheet Name of Reader: Gabrial  Name of Writer: XXX
Read your neighbor’s paper while doing the tasks below. Remember the habits of mind and suspend judgement when reading. Keep the five moves in mind when reading and think about how the writer is bringing each of those moves into play within their essay. Don’t think too hard. 
Noticing/Pointing: Which words, phrases, or passages somehow strike you? Are there any passages that stick out to you? Write the most prominent ones here. 
I think that the thing that sticks out to me the most is that the woman has eaten her children. That is an interesting topic, for a generic girl at guys feet. You would assume that she is begging him or being submissive to him. 
Center of Gravity:  Which part of the essay somehow seems important, resonant, or generative? This could be what was intended to be the main point or it could be a section that holds more weight than others. Sometimes the center of gravity is a seemingly minor detail or example. 
“The woman`s affection for the man can be seen when the woman kneels down, faces her husband and holds his arms to plead for forgiveness.”
5 Moves: List some of the authors repetitions, binaries, or anomalies that you notice within the piece. Does the author succeed in expanding upon these parts? 
The authors repetition is explaining the woman begging on her knees. The anomalies of their essay is talking about the snake skin wrapped around the woman’s body. The binaries are good versus evil, and betrayal versus forgiveness. Yes, the author succeeds in expanding upon these parts. 
Summary: Give the paper a creative title based on the content: first a phrase, then one word. 
At the Feet of a Man
Plead
What is almost said? 
It is almost said that the author thinks that the man will forgive the woman for her acts. 
What do you want to hear more about? 
I want to hear more about what you think that the situation is, rather than the facts from a previous story. It needs more of analyzing of the photo, it will help it become a stronger paper. 
Essay 1: Visual Analysis Rubric
  
Requirements
 
Formatted according to MLA essay   style and includes a Works Cited page 
 
Is at least 1,000 words in length and   includes the image in the essay
 
Begins by introducing the text   (image), author, and context surrounding the piece to an audience who is not   familiar with the work 
 
Includes a detailed and objective   summary of the text to be analyzed (200 words)
 
Transitions smoothly from summary to   analysis and from analysis to interpretation
 
Applies Notice